Hello Peers!
HERE is a link to my draft of my QRG
Remember that this is a draft and I still have a far ways to go before I get to my final project. The last page is not completed and still requires a lot of work and refinement. I appreciate any feedback that you may have especially on the form of the QRG. I will continue working hard on this QRG and also will listen to any possible Peer Reviews.
Friday, May 6, 2016
Editorial Report 15b
Almost there!
This class brought me into many unfamiliar situations that I was not ready for. The main and first unfamiliar situation that I faced was Google Blogger. I had never blogged a day in my life and had absolutely no idea where to begin. The idea of creating blogs for my content seemed so vague to me and I did not know what or how much information to include. I struggled with how long my blogs should be, how they should be structured, and how well the writing needed to be for them. At first in the blogs I was writing at the highest quality as if I were writing an academic essay every time I made a blog. I had no idea how to put a picture in, how to cite it, how to make a good title for a blog, how to have a sentence that pulled the audience it. It was all so foreign to me but I had to figure out a way. Overtime the blogs became easier and I got into a good rhythm when making them.
Another unfamiliar situations was the tasks for the blogs. One specific example was finding the academic journal when I had never been in the library due to study rooms and had never looked at any upper level academic journals before.
My conclusion will tie all these concepts together to show a struggle that everyone can relate with. All of these different topics combine to create the biggest hardships that I had with this class. The conclusion will also relate with the audience that all the blogs and projects are nearly over and we can be proud of the work that we have completed.\
OLD:
This class brought me into many unfamiliar situations that I was not ready for. The main and first unfamiliar situation that I faced was Google Blogger. I had never blogged a day in my life and had absolutely no idea where to begin. The idea of creating blogs for my content seemed so vague to me and I did not know what or how much information to include. I struggled with how long my blogs should be, how they should be structured, and how well the writing needed to be for them. At first in the blogs I was writing at the highest quality as if I were writing an academic essay every time I made a blog. I had no idea how to put a picture in, how to cite it, how to make a good title for a blog, how to have a sentence that pulled the audience it. It was all so foreign to me but I had to figure out a way. Overtime the blogs became easier and I got into a good rhythm when making them.
Another unfamiliar situations was the tasks for the blogs. One specific example was finding the academic journal when I had never been in the library due to study rooms and had never looked at any upper level academic journals before.
My conclusion will tie all these concepts together to show a struggle that everyone can relate with. All of these different topics combine to create the biggest hardships that I had with this class. The conclusion will also relate with the audience that all the blogs and projects are nearly over and we can be proud of the work that we have completed.\
NEW:
The idea of creating blogs for my content seemed so vague to me and I did not know what or how much information to include. I struggled with how long my blogs should be, how they should be structured, and how well the writing needed to be for them.
This course has been a journey. Not only did I expand my knowledge in many different topics and especially in my field of study. I expanded my work ethic, improved my lifestyle, and became a better student overall.
I have yet to completely master time management but I definitely have greatly improved every aspect of my time management skills and decreased my procrastination habits due to in part to the rigor of this class and the time commitment that was needed to succeed. Had I not changed my time management I would not have done well in this class and very well may not have passed the class in its entirety because the time would have caught up to me and I would have not finished all the projects.
Editorial Report 15a
Making it all Better
The next struggle when it came to learning new technology was the video essay. I have never created a video essay in my life and had no idea where to begin. I spent so much time struggling with the mental barrier that was the daunting task of having to create a video essay. I had not the slightest idea what program I would use to edit my video, where I would get my video clips from, where I would get audio from, and what content I would create in my video. When it comes to creating videos I am one of the least creative people that I have ever met. After overcoming the fear of creating a video however I was able to work my way through it and figure out how to successfully create a video essay.
OLD:
For this class I had to work in two different mediums that I had never experienced in my academic career and these were a podcast and a video essay. My very first project was a podcast and I had no idea what to do at the start. Luckily I am very familiar with technology and a quick learner as I worked in the Geek Squad fixing computers throughout most of high school. I found the program audacity was on of the most popular programs and downloaded it then played around. After messing around with the program for a little bit I was able to make a podcast easily. Then I already had a quality microphone to create the project and made a podcast that I am very proud of.The next struggle when it came to learning new technology was the video essay. I have never created a video essay in my life and had no idea where to begin. I spent so much time struggling with the mental barrier that was the daunting task of having to create a video essay. I had not the slightest idea what program I would use to edit my video, where I would get my video clips from, where I would get audio from, and what content I would create in my video. When it comes to creating videos I am one of the least creative people that I have ever met. After overcoming the fear of creating a video however I was able to work my way through it and figure out how to successfully create a video essay.
NEW:
The next struggle when it came to learning new technology was the video essay. I have never created a video essay in my life and had no idea where to begin. I spent so much time struggling with the mental barrier that was the daunting task of having to create a video essay. I had not the slightest idea what program I would use to edit my video, where I would get my video clips from, where I would get audio from, and what content I would create in my video.
When it comes to creating videos I am the least creative person that I have ever met. After overcoming the fear of creating a video however I was able to work my way through it and figure out how to successfully create a video essay. I struggled through these creative blocks and made a video that I was very proud of and even watched it through probably hundreds of times just enjoying the content and especially enjoying the music that I put in it.
I found the program Audacity was one of the most popular programs and downloaded it then played around. After messing around with the program for a little bit I was able to make a podcast easily. Then I already had a quality microphone to create the project and made a podcast that I am very proud of. I learned and adapted quickly to the new technology needed to make a podcast.
Thursday, May 5, 2016
Peer Review Jake Gyles
The rough draft for Jake can be found HERE
I think that overall you have a great video! I enjoy how you are talking throughout the entire video and have pictures that are interesting and keep the viewer watching. Another thing that I enjoy is how you put text over the videos while you talked which helped in following your ideas. One thing I would change is I would add more pictures of your blog work. Additionally I would talk about each individual project and genre. This would help guide you in your overview of the year. Showing an example of each would help the viewers relate and understand what your projects are. Overall you are off to a good start and I am excited to see the final project!
Sunday, May 1, 2016
Peer Review for Ben Meyer
Doing all it takes
Content Suggestion:
I believe that Ben has some amazing ideas for his project and for the creation of his video. One thing that I do love is the idea of making the introduction similar to a bedtime story with Ben sitting by a fire as this will add comedy to the video and keep the viewers involved. I like how Ben is going to introduce himself in third person, taking away personal bias. Ben is going to do an amazing job on this project and I am confident that his beautiful soul will create a beautiful and amazing project because Ben never does anything less.
Content Suggestion:
I believe that Ben has some amazing ideas for his project and for the creation of his video. One thing that I do love is the idea of making the introduction similar to a bedtime story with Ben sitting by a fire as this will add comedy to the video and keep the viewers involved. I like how Ben is going to introduce himself in third person, taking away personal bias. Ben is going to do an amazing job on this project and I am confident that his beautiful soul will create a beautiful and amazing project because Ben never does anything less.
Production Report 14b
The Final Stepping Stone to a QRG
Main Body Section: Learning New Technology
For this class I had to work in two different mediums that I had never experienced in my academic career and these were a podcast and a video essay. My very first project was a podcast and I had no idea what to do at the start. Luckily I am very familiar with technology and a quick learner as I worked in the Geek Squad fixing computers throughout most of high school. I found the program audacity was on of the most popular programs and downloaded it then played around. After messing around with the program for a little bit I was able to make a podcast easily. Then I already had a quality microphone to create the project and made a podcast that I am very proud of.
The next struggle when it came to learning new technology was the video essay. I have never created a video essay in my life and had no idea where to begin. I spent so much time struggling with the mental barrier that was the daunting task of having to create a video essay. I had not the slightest idea what program I would use to edit my video, where I would get my video clips from, where I would get audio from, and what content I would create in my video. When it comes to creating videos I am one of the least creative people that I have ever met. After overcoming the fear of creating a video however I was able to work my way through it and figure out how to successfully create a video essay.
Outline Item:
Main Body Section: Learning New Technology
For this class I had to work in two different mediums that I had never experienced in my academic career and these were a podcast and a video essay. My very first project was a podcast and I had no idea what to do at the start. Luckily I am very familiar with technology and a quick learner as I worked in the Geek Squad fixing computers throughout most of high school. I found the program audacity was on of the most popular programs and downloaded it then played around. After messing around with the program for a little bit I was able to make a podcast easily. Then I already had a quality microphone to create the project and made a podcast that I am very proud of.
The next struggle when it came to learning new technology was the video essay. I have never created a video essay in my life and had no idea where to begin. I spent so much time struggling with the mental barrier that was the daunting task of having to create a video essay. I had not the slightest idea what program I would use to edit my video, where I would get my video clips from, where I would get audio from, and what content I would create in my video. When it comes to creating videos I am one of the least creative people that I have ever met. After overcoming the fear of creating a video however I was able to work my way through it and figure out how to successfully create a video essay.
Work:
My very first project was a podcast and I had no idea what to do at the start. Luckily I am very familiar with technology and a quick learner as I worked in the Geek Squad fixing computers throughout most of high school. I found the program audacity was on of the most popular programs and downloaded it then played around. After messing around with the program for a little bit I was able to make a podcast easily. Then I already had a quality microphone to create the project and made a podcast that I am very proud of.
Production Report 14A
The Beginning of the End
Section from Outline:
Opening Section: Introduction to my writing process and how I have grown through the class through my three previous projects. I am going to touch on my skills in time management, learning new technology, and adapting to unfamiliar situations.Adaptation of Outline Item:
For this part of my QRG I plan to include a link to my very first blog as if to show the beginning of my journey through this class. I will have a picture of the Google Blogger to give people a sentiment of the blogs and the work that we all shared. Finally I will pick a good relate able font for the entire QRG.
Friday, April 29, 2016
Production Schedule
When Will I Get This Stuff Done?!?!?
Location: My dorm on my dual monitor desktop setup
Planned Date & Time: This Sunday - Friday an hour each day
Resources Required: My Computer
Date Completed: TBA
Changes Made After Completion: Have not completed yet
What is to Be Done:
For my production next week I need to do the following things:
- Find examples of blogs to link in my QRG
- Take photos for my QRG that students can relate too
- Begin to put the QRG together
- Find evidence of time management
- Find evidence of adapting to new technology
- Find evidence of being put in unfamiliar situations
Planned Date & Time: This Sunday - Friday an hour each day
Resources Required: My Computer
Date Completed: TBA
Changes Made After Completion: Have not completed yet
Thursday, April 28, 2016
Content Outline
Planning out the Final Project
Opening Section: Introduction to my writing process and how I have grown through the class through my three previous projects. I am going to touch on my skills in time management, learning new technology, and adapting to unfamiliar situations.
Opening Section: Introduction to my writing process and how I have grown through the class through my three previous projects. I am going to touch on my skills in time management, learning new technology, and adapting to unfamiliar situations.
Main Body Section: Time Management
Through this semester my time management skills have increased exponentially. My time management varied for every week of the blog work. Blogs took up nearly all my time for this course and were a large part of the course-load. I was very inconsistent for time management. One week I would sit down and crank out a ton of blogs as early as Tuesday of the week and then having nothing to do for the rest of the week. On another week I would tell myself that I would get all of the blogs done early but would instead spend massive amounts of time staring at a blank blog early in the week and procrastinate it all the way until Sunday. Other times I would maybe get 1/4th of the blogs done early in the week and left with a slightly smaller load when Sunday came around. On the worst of the time management weeks I would procrastinate the blogs completely and leave them all for Sunday to do from when I woke up all the way to the deadline of midnight that day. On Super Bowl Sunday I spent the entire day doing blog work while the game played off to the side and I only caught glimpses of the game and the famous commercials that played throughout. In all, time management was one of the hardest aspects of the course and if it was not done well through the semester it could possible end to a snowball effect of not getting any of the blog work done. I will also show examples of blogs where I managed my time effectively and examples of blogs where I may have been rushed and ran out of time to complete the blog to the quality that I would have liked.
Main Body Section: Learning New Technology
For this class I had to work in two different mediums that I had never experienced in my academic career and these were a podcast and a video essay. My very first project was a podcast and I had no idea what to do at the start. Luckily I am very familiar with technology and a quick learner as I worked in the Geek Squad fixing computers throughout most of high school. I found the program audacity was on of the most popular programs and downloaded it then played around. After messing around with the program for a little bit I was able to make a podcast easily. Then I already had a quality microphone to create the project and made a podcast that I am very proud of.
The next struggle when it came to learning new technology was the video essay. I have never created a video essay in my life and had no idea where to begin. I spent so much time struggling with the mental barrier that was the daunting task of having to create a video essay. I had not the slightest idea what program I would use to edit my video, where I would get my video clips from, where I would get audio from, and what content I would create in my video. When it comes to creating videos I am one of the least creative people that I have ever met. After overcoming the fear of creating a video however I was able to work my way through it and figure out how to successfully create a video essay.
Main Body Section: Adapting to Unfamiliar Situations
This class brought me into many unfamiliar situations that I was not ready for. The main and first unfamiliar situation that I faced was Google Blogger. I had never blogged a day in my life and had absolutely no idea where to begin. The idea of creating blogs for my content seemed so vague to me and I did not know what or how much information to include. I struggled with how long my blogs should be, how they should be structured, and how well the writing needed to be for them. At first in the blogs I was writing at the highest quality as if I were writing an academic essay every time I made a blog. I had no idea how to put a picture in, how to cite it, how to make a good title for a blog, how to have a sentence that pulled the audience it. It was all so foreign to me but I had to figure out a way. Overtime the blogs became easier and I got into a good rhythm when making them.
Another unfamiliar situations was the tasks for the blogs. One specific example was finding the academic journal when I had never been in the library due to study rooms and had never looked at any upper level academic journals before.
Closing: Explaining a Large Significance
My conclusion will tie all these concepts together to show a struggle that everyone can relate with. All of these different topics combine to create the biggest hardships that I had with this class. The conclusion will also relate with the audience that all the blogs and projects are nearly over and we can be proud of the work that we have completed.
Tuesday, April 26, 2016
Editorial Report 13a
Finalizing my rough and revised versions
For this editorial report I decided to focus on all the text of my video. Through the video I have captions, subtitles, and credits that are texts superimposed on the screen. At first the text was just completely white and on the screen.
To change this I went through so many different possible options of texts. I changed the fonts, colors, size, outline size, and outline color in order to find something that I could read easily through the video. I ended up with white text, medium sized outline, black outline, and bolded the text as well, which ended up with a text that is very easy and reasonable for the eye to read when in front of various videos.
For this editorial report I decided to focus on all the text of my video. Through the video I have captions, subtitles, and credits that are texts superimposed on the screen. At first the text was just completely white and on the screen.
To change this I went through so many different possible options of texts. I changed the fonts, colors, size, outline size, and outline color in order to find something that I could read easily through the video. I ended up with white text, medium sized outline, black outline, and bolded the text as well, which ended up with a text that is very easy and reasonable for the eye to read when in front of various videos.
Editorial Report 13b
Editing the Final Parts of my Project
For my final editorial report I decided to focus on the music of my video. Previously, I had music that was very fast and seemed to rush the video. This music also only extended through the song for about 30 seconds and then quickly transitioned to another 30 second song.
To change this I went online and found a subtle 3 minute song that I believe does not take attention away from the video but at the same time provides slight entertainment for the viewer. After making this song choice I believe the the video has benefitted greatly because it gives the viewer a good feeling and puts them in a better mood. After hearing this music, it will make the viewer more likely to agree with the argument because they are in a lighter mood.
For my final editorial report I decided to focus on the music of my video. Previously, I had music that was very fast and seemed to rush the video. This music also only extended through the song for about 30 seconds and then quickly transitioned to another 30 second song.
To change this I went online and found a subtle 3 minute song that I believe does not take attention away from the video but at the same time provides slight entertainment for the viewer. After making this song choice I believe the the video has benefitted greatly because it gives the viewer a good feeling and puts them in a better mood. After hearing this music, it will make the viewer more likely to agree with the argument because they are in a lighter mood.
Reflection on Local Revision Process
The Final Reflection and The End of My Project
Some of the major successes that I experienced during this week's process work is the creation and finalization of my video essay. During this week I was able to create a large majority of my video as previously I did extensive planning for the creation of the video. Some things that went right were putting the video together, adding music, and creating a work that I was proud to turn in at the end of the day.
Some major challenges that I faced during this week's process work was creating a video. I have never made a video in my life and had no idea how to start the process of creating a video. I first had to decide how I would begin the video, something I had no idea what do do for. Then I had to find content to include into my video. Finally I had to put this all together with animations and music to look like a professionally made video.
Next week I will begin the last and final project and I believe it will go very well.
Overall I am feeling very happy about this project at this point.
Some of the major successes that I experienced during this week's process work is the creation and finalization of my video essay. During this week I was able to create a large majority of my video as previously I did extensive planning for the creation of the video. Some things that went right were putting the video together, adding music, and creating a work that I was proud to turn in at the end of the day.
Some major challenges that I faced during this week's process work was creating a video. I have never made a video in my life and had no idea how to start the process of creating a video. I first had to decide how I would begin the video, something I had no idea what do do for. Then I had to find content to include into my video. Finally I had to put this all together with animations and music to look like a professionally made video.
Next week I will begin the last and final project and I believe it will go very well.
Overall I am feeling very happy about this project at this point.
Sunday, April 24, 2016
Revised Post to Peer Reviewers
The Finale
I was expecting my post-production process to be hefty amount of work and the time where I put the most work into my video essay because I did not create the best rough draft and planned to get the kinks out of my project as well as make most of the video because I spent most of my draft time creating scripts and a plan for the entire video in order to create a flowing video that properly creates an argument and addresses the opposite argument in a professional way to get the idea across to people on either side of the argument.
LINK
I was expecting my post-production process to be hefty amount of work and the time where I put the most work into my video essay because I did not create the best rough draft and planned to get the kinks out of my project as well as make most of the video because I spent most of my draft time creating scripts and a plan for the entire video in order to create a flowing video that properly creates an argument and addresses the opposite argument in a professional way to get the idea across to people on either side of the argument.
LINK
Peer Review for PJ Noghrehchi
Final Peer Review Before the End
PJ's Essay can be found HERE
Activity 5: Make a Content Suggestion
Overall, PJ has written a very strong essay with a clear and concise argument regarding the banning of elicit serenades to sororities on the University of Arizona. PJ successfully adds a personal sentiment by explain his membership in a fraternity here at Arizona. Then he gives a personal anecdote of when the news was released that fraternities could no longer serenade in the manner that they had been doing previously. After this PJ gives statements from both sides of the argument as to why serenades were banned and then gives arguments as to why we should keep having the same type of serenades that were occurring on campus. One suggestion that I could make is to find another party to get input from that is not fraternities or sororities to get a feeling for how the general population feels about this issue.
PJ's Essay can be found HERE
Activity 5: Make a Content Suggestion
Overall, PJ has written a very strong essay with a clear and concise argument regarding the banning of elicit serenades to sororities on the University of Arizona. PJ successfully adds a personal sentiment by explain his membership in a fraternity here at Arizona. Then he gives a personal anecdote of when the news was released that fraternities could no longer serenade in the manner that they had been doing previously. After this PJ gives statements from both sides of the argument as to why serenades were banned and then gives arguments as to why we should keep having the same type of serenades that were occurring on campus. One suggestion that I could make is to find another party to get input from that is not fraternities or sororities to get a feeling for how the general population feels about this issue.
Peer Review for Jake Gyles
I am going to help you get an A, young one
Jake's essay can be found HERE.
Making a Content Suggestion:
Overall, Jake has written a very strong essay. In his essay, Jake is arguing that school lunches are the better option for children currently attending school that still serves lunch in a cafeteria. When reading Jake's paper, I did notice that often the brevity of his paragraphs hurt his argument because the paper seemed to jump very quickly from one argument to another without expanding on the facts that he would cite. I believe that Jake needs to expand more on the arguments that he gives. An example of this is his vegan option argument, which I believe neither hurts or helps his argument, it just makes the reader confused because being vegan is such a small percentage of kids in elementary or high school that it does not really make an impact on the argument of bringing a packed lunch to school. Also for his personal statement I believe that Jake generalized lunches from home based off of the lunches that his parents packed for him when he was in school when in reality a packed lunch could be nearly everything and depends on what the parent decided to include.
Jake's essay can be found HERE.
Making a Content Suggestion:
Overall, Jake has written a very strong essay. In his essay, Jake is arguing that school lunches are the better option for children currently attending school that still serves lunch in a cafeteria. When reading Jake's paper, I did notice that often the brevity of his paragraphs hurt his argument because the paper seemed to jump very quickly from one argument to another without expanding on the facts that he would cite. I believe that Jake needs to expand more on the arguments that he gives. An example of this is his vegan option argument, which I believe neither hurts or helps his argument, it just makes the reader confused because being vegan is such a small percentage of kids in elementary or high school that it does not really make an impact on the argument of bringing a packed lunch to school. Also for his personal statement I believe that Jake generalized lunches from home based off of the lunches that his parents packed for him when he was in school when in reality a packed lunch could be nearly everything and depends on what the parent decided to include.
Sunday, April 17, 2016
Reflection on Global Revision Process
Getting Ready to Package it up and Send it in
Some major successes for this week's production work is that I pretty have a plan set up for the final of my video essay. After this week of production I should be able to refine my rough draft of my video essay and my script in order to convey my full argument into the video. An example of this during this week is the revision process where I realized that I had to add a counterargument in order to create a fully developed argument.
Some major challenges that I faced during this week's process work is that I had absolutely no idea how to create a video let alone a video essay. I had to first figure out how I would create a video and then find videos the utilize within my video. Once getting these videos I had to be very creative and put them together into an entire video which proved to be challenging. Overall the creativity proved to be the hardest aspect of this week's production and also creating a video essay as a whole.
Next week I believe that my experience will go very well and that I will easily put together a complete video that I will be proud to turn in. I am feeling very confident about the project that we are ending the near of it and I will be able to move on the the next project as the ending of school nears.
Some major successes for this week's production work is that I pretty have a plan set up for the final of my video essay. After this week of production I should be able to refine my rough draft of my video essay and my script in order to convey my full argument into the video. An example of this during this week is the revision process where I realized that I had to add a counterargument in order to create a fully developed argument.
Some major challenges that I faced during this week's process work is that I had absolutely no idea how to create a video let alone a video essay. I had to first figure out how I would create a video and then find videos the utilize within my video. Once getting these videos I had to be very creative and put them together into an entire video which proved to be challenging. Overall the creativity proved to be the hardest aspect of this week's production and also creating a video essay as a whole.
Next week I believe that my experience will go very well and that I will easily put together a complete video that I will be proud to turn in. I am feeling very confident about the project that we are ending the near of it and I will be able to move on the the next project as the ending of school nears.
Open Post to Peer Reviewers
The Honest Truth to Peer Reviewers
This was a rough week of production when it came to my project. I am doing a video essay and I spent hours sitting stressing and wonder how in the world I was going to be able to make a video. I wrote a script for my video essay but I do not have a working link of my video yet because I have not finished it. I do however believe that I will be very successful in making my project next week and can bring the strengths from my other blogs to this video to make a solid argument and a video essay that successfully follows all of the genres of a video essay.
Editorial Report 12B
Making a Video is Hard...
The next part of my video that I want to include on this editorial report is the counter argument within my video. While I make the argument that humans are not too dependent on computers I am going to show footage of current innovations and inventions that are only possible by computers to show people the life they would be living if they did not have computers in their lives.
The next part of my video that I want to include on this editorial report is the counter argument within my video. While I make the argument that humans are not too dependent on computers I am going to show footage of current innovations and inventions that are only possible by computers to show people the life they would be living if they did not have computers in their lives.
Editorial Report 12A
Ever so slightly changing my content
For this editorial report I want to describe the first part of the video that I have created. For the introduction of my video I included a news report on home computers from the 1980's talking about Apple, Steve Jobs, and the first home computer. I believe that this news introduction is a great way to start my video essay as it shows how far computers have come since they first started being purchased for home use and leisure. After this I will go a title screen that has stock footage of people using current day computers in a computer lab with captions and titles superimposed over the video to give the argument and the introduction to the problem.
I plan to change this by adding music into the entire starting scene. I feel that music will set the mood and I can continue to play music throughout the entire video to give something to listen to that at the same time will not take away from the video. Another change that I am thinking about doing is to create an actual title screen for the video after the introduction or after the stock footage of people on computers in the computer lab to give a physical transition from introducing the argument to actually arguing the argument.
For this editorial report I want to describe the first part of the video that I have created. For the introduction of my video I included a news report on home computers from the 1980's talking about Apple, Steve Jobs, and the first home computer. I believe that this news introduction is a great way to start my video essay as it shows how far computers have come since they first started being purchased for home use and leisure. After this I will go a title screen that has stock footage of people using current day computers in a computer lab with captions and titles superimposed over the video to give the argument and the introduction to the problem.
I plan to change this by adding music into the entire starting scene. I feel that music will set the mood and I can continue to play music throughout the entire video to give something to listen to that at the same time will not take away from the video. Another change that I am thinking about doing is to create an actual title screen for the video after the introduction or after the stock footage of people on computers in the computer lab to give a physical transition from introducing the argument to actually arguing the argument.
Peer Review for Jake Gyles
Jake needs the A so I am here to help
The content for Jake's project can be found HERE.
The content for Jake's project can be found HERE.
Activity 5: Making a Content Suggestion
Your introduction is very good but I believe that it may be too personal for this type of project. I would focus on more statements that can be considered factual rather than personal statements because people may read them and take them as purely opinion. The introduction should be less of a personal statement,
Peer Review for Malik Bullock
Helping him get the A
Malik's Rough Draft can be found HERE
Malik's Rough Draft can be found HERE
Activity 5: Make a content Suggestion
After reading over your script for your video essay I believe that you are off to a very good start. The first thing that I noticed that I would change in your script would be the first person perspective that you take in the very beginning. You state that you are saying this or that you believe this, I believe that making the video essay first person you lower the credibility of the content because people will instantly be turned off listening to the "opinion" of an undergraduate student. Instead, I would say everything that you say without the "I". State everything as if it were a fact so people can easily believe the things that you are saying and better understand your argument. Rather than stating your opinion, you can state it as a fact and then give evidence for those points, making your points even more credible.
Another thing that I would do in your video essay is include interviews and videos about minimum wage or even news articles that you can talk over to show how relevant of a topic this is within our current world.
Another thing that I would do in your video essay is include interviews and videos about minimum wage or even news articles that you can talk over to show how relevant of a topic this is within our current world.
Sunday, April 10, 2016
Production Report 11b
Doing the second part of being it together
Body Section 1
Main Idea: Humans are not too dependent on computers in their lives
Evidence 1: Technology is a necessity for our lives, File Keeping, Medicine, Daily Tasks
Evidence 2: Computers are an invention of humans for the betterment of their lives
Evidence 3: Computers make humans lives easier and more convenient
Evidence Proof: This evidence proves that computers are not a detriment to our lives. We made computers to better our lives and if we were to get rid of our computers the overall quality of life would be less. Tasks such as file keeping and medicine improve our lives everyday and aid in giving us longer lives. Computers being invented by humans means they are tailored for humans and will help us greatly. With an easier and more convenient life, we can use our time to do greater things and continually better the world.
Importance: These pieces of evidence are very important because they are all very practical things within our lives. Humans strive for the bettering of their lives and live for simplicity.
Outline Item:
Body Section 1
Main Idea: Humans are not too dependent on computers in their lives
Evidence 1: Technology is a necessity for our lives, File Keeping, Medicine, Daily Tasks
Evidence 2: Computers are an invention of humans for the betterment of their lives
Evidence 3: Computers make humans lives easier and more convenient
Evidence Proof: This evidence proves that computers are not a detriment to our lives. We made computers to better our lives and if we were to get rid of our computers the overall quality of life would be less. Tasks such as file keeping and medicine improve our lives everyday and aid in giving us longer lives. Computers being invented by humans means they are tailored for humans and will help us greatly. With an easier and more convenient life, we can use our time to do greater things and continually better the world.
Importance: These pieces of evidence are very important because they are all very practical things within our lives. Humans strive for the bettering of their lives and live for simplicity.
Adaptation of Outline Item
This will be the main part of my video essay. This part of the video will come right after I ask the audience questions in the intro. These questions will serve to make the audience think about their stance on this issue. I will then go into the argument that humans are not too dependent on computers in their lives. I will begin this by stating that technology is a necessity for our lives. From this I will show many different uses of technology that we depend on in society in order to live a better life. These videos will include file keeping such as medical records and then will show stock footage of file keeping on computers and then will show massive file cabinets that would have to be sorted through by hand. Then I will show people using search functions to find files quickly. Next I will show technology doing tasks that people usually do not think of such as the computers in cars that keep us safe like blind side technology and computers that avoid collisions. After this my video will go into how computers make humans live easier and more convient and show all of the amazing inventions that improve quality of life.
Production Report 11a
Laying the Foundation
Opening Section
Are humans too dependent on computers in their lives?
Introduce both sides of the argument that computers are necessary and that we are too dependent on computers
Ideas that will pull the readers attention are mentioning computer items that they use daily. Also another idea that will pull the readers attention is reflecting to the past before computers.
Outline Section:
Opening Section
Are humans too dependent on computers in their lives?
Introduce both sides of the argument that computers are necessary and that we are too dependent on computers
Ideas that will pull the readers attention are mentioning computer items that they use daily. Also another idea that will pull the readers attention is reflecting to the past before computers.
Adaptation of Outline Item
Here I will begin with introducing the argument in a non bias manner. I will simply state the question and not state my stance on the argument. Within this I will include videos of professionals talking at TED talks to increase my credibility. By showing people giving speeches in front of an audience, the viewer will believe my points because it seems as if these topics are being talked about by these professionals and not just through the eyes of a college freshman. Next I will give short clips of technology in our society like people using computers and everyone being on their cellphones. Additionally I will show computers and other technology to emphasize the size of the industrial plants that create all of this technology. Finally I will end this section by asking the viewers questions that will set them up for the rest of the argument.
Peer Review for Alex Eulano
Coming Together to Help Those in Need
Activity 5: Make a Content Suggestion
HERE is the Link to Alex Eulano's Production Report
Reading the adaptation of the outline item for production report 11b I think you've done a very good job and are off to a great start. One main suggestion that I would include for your content is to include facts rather than a section that is "my honest opinion" because this is supposed to be a public argument and not include any first person statements. By saying that it is your honest opinion it devalues the credibility of the project due to you having low credibility being just an undergraduate student. Another suggestion that I would give to you is to include information that you can cite and then cite this information in your project. The second part of this adaptation would be to get rid of assumptions such as saying that the whole world would be livid because this is not an argument but just an assumption.
Peer Review for Ben Macklin
Peer Review: Better our friends around us
LINK to Ben Backlin's Production Report
LINK to Ben Backlin's Production Report
Activity 5: Make a Content Suggestion
Your rough cut in the production report is a good start but seems very broad and rushed. I would try to be more specific in your introduction and when you make the video essay I would be sure to include the argument and position on your topic in an interesting manner. One major content suggestion that I would give to you is to is to find images and videos through the internet in order to improve your project. You said you will provide pictures to help immerse the audience which is an amazing start. One major thing I would add that you did not mention is subtitles or words to help guide the audience through your arguments and keep them focused on the screen through reading because if you only have pictures and videos they often will wander off.
Reflection on Production
How did I do?
Some major successes that occurred with week were developing the part of my project for the first two parts of my outline, the introduction and the first major argument. Overall I believe that I am off to a great start when it comes to my project and I will have a suitable rough draft when next Sunday comes around. Some evidence of my successes for this week are production report 11a and production report 11b, which are the main first parts of my projects.
Some challenges I faced this week were figuring out how to make a video and brainstorming how I was going to make my video along with what I was going to put in the video. I have little to no experience making videos and had to torrent Sony Vegas Pro in order to create a quality video for this project. It was a struggle for me to think of the content to put in the video as I do not have one of the most visually creative minds.
Next week I think will be a struggle as it is when I will have to do the most work because I will have to create the rest of my draft. Based on my experiences this week I am finally starting to stress less on my blog work.
Overall I am feeling very happy about this project because it is a topic that I actually enjpy and a project that I can actually create a work that I am proud of.
Some major successes that occurred with week were developing the part of my project for the first two parts of my outline, the introduction and the first major argument. Overall I believe that I am off to a great start when it comes to my project and I will have a suitable rough draft when next Sunday comes around. Some evidence of my successes for this week are production report 11a and production report 11b, which are the main first parts of my projects.
Some challenges I faced this week were figuring out how to make a video and brainstorming how I was going to make my video along with what I was going to put in the video. I have little to no experience making videos and had to torrent Sony Vegas Pro in order to create a quality video for this project. It was a struggle for me to think of the content to put in the video as I do not have one of the most visually creative minds.
Next week I think will be a struggle as it is when I will have to do the most work because I will have to create the rest of my draft. Based on my experiences this week I am finally starting to stress less on my blog work.
Overall I am feeling very happy about this project because it is a topic that I actually enjpy and a project that I can actually create a work that I am proud of.
Sunday, April 3, 2016
Reflection on Pre-Production
How did I do this work?
Some major successes during this week's process work were creating the rhetorical analysis, a content outline, and doing the research report. The rhetorical analysis is where I was finally able to organize all of my ideas for this project into one place and I will be able to look back on to it in order to guide my project.
Some main challenges that I experienced during this week's process work was the amount of work that all these blogs required. Making a rhetorical analysis, research report, and content outline can be very draining and is not something that should be procrastinated. Another challenge I had was staying focused on the blogs while doing the research report.
I think next week will go much better because I have set aside time each day to work on my blogs rather than save the entire workload for the weekend.
Overall I am feeling very confident about this project because I am very interested in the topic.
Some major successes during this week's process work were creating the rhetorical analysis, a content outline, and doing the research report. The rhetorical analysis is where I was finally able to organize all of my ideas for this project into one place and I will be able to look back on to it in order to guide my project.
Some main challenges that I experienced during this week's process work was the amount of work that all these blogs required. Making a rhetorical analysis, research report, and content outline can be very draining and is not something that should be procrastinated. Another challenge I had was staying focused on the blogs while doing the research report.
I think next week will go much better because I have set aside time each day to work on my blogs rather than save the entire workload for the weekend.
Overall I am feeling very confident about this project because I am very interested in the topic.
Production Schedule
Doing work on the daily at all hours
Production Schedule:
What is to be done:
During production I will need to prepare myself first for making a video essay. I will have to gather a large amount of different video clips in order to give myself something to edit with. Another thing I will have to do is obtain Sony Vegas Pro so I can properly edit my video essay to where it does not look rushed and mediocre. Then I need to make a script for the video essay. This script will be my main guide for the video and also include the words that will be on the screen.
Location: All of this work will be done in my dorm room because I have my desktop computer with two monitors to aid me in multitasking and a better keyboard.
Planned Date & Time: I plan to spend 3-4 hours each day on Thursday, Friday, Saturday, and Sunday At this point I should have the blogwork done.
Resources Required: Myself, Desktop computer, internet
Date Completed: Sunday will be the date completed for the production phase
Changes made after completions: I have yet to make any changes because I have not yet completed the production phase.
Peer Review for Elizabeth Hernandez
Reviewing, Reviewing, Reviewing
Here you can find the Rhetorical Analysis for Elizabeth Hernandez
Here you can find the Rhetorical Analysis for Elizabeth Hernandez
Activity 1: Make a brainstorming suggestion
From reading over your outline, it seems that you have an extensive knowledge of interracial couples in the media and this is a topic that you very much believe in. Overall the outline is very detailed, includes accurate sources, and well done! Your topic of bringing non-white interracial couples is a very interesting topic but may be very detailed and complex as this is an issue since the beginning of man. In order to make a better argument I feel that your rhetorical analysis should have all the reasons why media should not include interracial couples that are non-white. From doing this you will have a sound argument that can address both sides of the argument and then develop sound counterpoints. I would find sources that also address the other side of the argument to help you develop more counterarguments. In all this is a great outline and it sounds like you are really invested in the topic, which means you can create a better project.
Great Work!
Peer Review for Brady Thomas
Bettering Other's Work
Here is the Content Outline for Brady Thomas
Activity 3: Making an Outlining Suggestion
Overall I believe this outline is a very good start for project 3. The outline does however seem shortened and rushed. One good thing that you did on the outline was organize your sources in each body. One thing I would include in the outline is an argument against cyber security.
I was also slightly confused in the outline as to what your public argument is, that cyber security is important? I would try to develop a concrete argument because I feel like saying cybersecurity is important is something that maybe can be very difficult to argue because it is pretty much certain that cyber security is a necessity. In order to create a better project I would find a specific argument within the field of cybersecurity that can be argued like encryption.
Content Outline
Making a Road Map
Opening Section
- Are humans too dependent on computers in their lives?
- Introduce both sides of the argument that computers are necessary and that we are too dependent on computers
- Ideas that will pull the readers attention are mentioning computer items that they use daily. Also another idea that will pull the readers attention is reflecting to the past before computers.
Body Section 1
- Main Idea: Humans are not too dependent on computers in their lives
- Evidence 1: Technology is a necessity for our lives, File Keeping, Medicine, Daily Tasks
- Evidence 2: Computers are an invention of humans for the betterment of their lives
- Evidence 3: Computers make humans lives easier and more convenient
- Evidence Proof: This evidence proves that computers are not a detriment to our lives. We made computers to better our lives and if we were to get rid of our computers the overall quality of life would be less. Tasks such as file keeping and medicine improve our lives everyday and aid in giving us longer lives. Computers being invented by humans means they are tailored for humans and will help us greatly. With an easier and more convenient life, we can use our time to do greater things and continually better the world.
- Importance: These pieces of evidence are very important because they are all very practical things within our lives. Humans strive for the bettering of their lives and live for simplicity.
Body Section 2
- Main Idea: Humans are too dependent on computers in their lives.
- Evidence 1: Humans did not need computers for the majority of our existence
- Evidence 2: Computers are taking away from social experience and limiting social skills
- Evidence 3: Computers are taking away jobs from people and we will get to the point where humans cannot even do these jobs themselves if they needed to
- Evidence Proof: This evidence proves that computers are not e necessity in life but instead taking away from reality. Humans are losing their skills that they worked so hard to develop like craftsmanship. At the end of the day our faces in computers will be detrimental to our development as a race.
Research Report
Gathering all the necessary information
Man-Computer Symbiosis
Author:
Host:
Source:
Author Credibility:
Target Audience:
Sources Main Purpose:
Contextual Details:
This Computer Will Grow Your Food in the Future
Author:
Host:
Source:
Author Credibility:
Target Audience:
Sources Main Purpose:
Contextual Details:
The New Bionics that let us Run, Climb, and Dance
Author:
Host:
Source:
Author Credibility:
Target Audience:
Sources Main Purpose:
Contextual Details:
Meet the Robots for Humanity
Author:
Host:
Source:
Author Credibility:
Target Audience:
Sources Main Purpose:
Contextual Details:
Dependence on Computer Games by Adolescents
Author:
Host:
Source:
Author Credibility:
Target Audience:
Sources Main Purpose:
Contextual Details:
Debate on Human Progress
Author: Steven Pinker
Host: Munk Debates
Source: YouTube
Author Credibility: Professor at Harvard University in the College of Psychology
He has won awards from the American Psychological Association, the National Academy of Sciences, the Royal Institution, the Cognitive Neuroscience Society and the American Humanist Association.
Target Audience: The target audience for this source are those within the field of psychology and also those interested in psychology extensively. The source is a debate between psychologist.
Sources Main Purpose: The main purpose of this source is a debate on human progress regarding the mind and how we are influenced by our own inventions (Computers)
Contextual Details: The source is uploaded to YouTube for Education Purposes only. The debate is occurring at a scientific conference.
Author: Steven Pinker
Host: Munk Debates
Source: YouTube
Author Credibility: Professor at Harvard University in the College of Psychology
He has won awards from the American Psychological Association, the National Academy of Sciences, the Royal Institution, the Cognitive Neuroscience Society and the American Humanist Association.
Target Audience: The target audience for this source are those within the field of psychology and also those interested in psychology extensively. The source is a debate between psychologist.
Sources Main Purpose: The main purpose of this source is a debate on human progress regarding the mind and how we are influenced by our own inventions (Computers)
Contextual Details: The source is uploaded to YouTube for Education Purposes only. The debate is occurring at a scientific conference.
Home Computer Revolution (1981)
Author: Apple
Host: YouTube
Source: Current
Author Credibility: The source is credible because it is a flash back to the past of an Apple advertisement for computers made by Apple themselves.
Target Audience: The target audience of this advertisement is those with a need for a personal home computer in the 1980's.
Sources Main Purpose: The main purpose of this source is to convince viewers to go out and purchase an Apple home computer.
Contextual Details: One important detail of the video is the narrator saying that for the first time computers can be used in home with a screen and at an affordable rate. Another important detail is that the video includes an interview with Steve Jobs, one of the important innovators of home computers with his company Apple Inc.
Author: Apple
Host: YouTube
Source: Current
Author Credibility: The source is credible because it is a flash back to the past of an Apple advertisement for computers made by Apple themselves.
Target Audience: The target audience of this advertisement is those with a need for a personal home computer in the 1980's.
Sources Main Purpose: The main purpose of this source is to convince viewers to go out and purchase an Apple home computer.
Contextual Details: One important detail of the video is the narrator saying that for the first time computers can be used in home with a screen and at an affordable rate. Another important detail is that the video includes an interview with Steve Jobs, one of the important innovators of home computers with his company Apple Inc.
The Wonderful and Terrifying Implications of Computers than can learn
Author: Jeremy Howard
Host: TEDxBrussels
Source: TED Talks
Author Credibility: Jeremy Howard is the CEO of Enlitic, an advanced machine learning company. Howard is a data scientist, which gives him huge credibility for talking on how computers can learn.
Target Audience: The target audience is the general public that want to learn and go to TED Talks in order to learn more and expand their mind.
Sources Main Purpose: The main purpose of this source is to inform people on the future of self learning computers.
Contextual Details: Some important details from this video is that computers now have the ability to teach themselves languages like Chinese and also the ability to recognize individual objects within photos.
Author: Jeremy Howard
Host: TEDxBrussels
Source: TED Talks
Author Credibility: Jeremy Howard is the CEO of Enlitic, an advanced machine learning company. Howard is a data scientist, which gives him huge credibility for talking on how computers can learn.
Target Audience: The target audience is the general public that want to learn and go to TED Talks in order to learn more and expand their mind.
Sources Main Purpose: The main purpose of this source is to inform people on the future of self learning computers.
Contextual Details: Some important details from this video is that computers now have the ability to teach themselves languages like Chinese and also the ability to recognize individual objects within photos.
Connected, but alone?
Author:
Host:
Source:
Author Credibility:
Target Audience:
Sources Main Purpose:
Contextual Details:
Author:
Host:
Source:
Author Credibility:
Target Audience:
Sources Main Purpose:
Contextual Details:
The Cultural Impact of Computer Technology
Author:
Host:
Source:
Author Credibility:
Target Audience:
Sources Main Purpose:
Contextual Details:
Author:
Host:
Source:
Author Credibility:
Target Audience:
Sources Main Purpose:
Contextual Details:
Man-Computer Symbiosis
Author:
Host:
Source:
Author Credibility:
Target Audience:
Sources Main Purpose:
Contextual Details:
This Computer Will Grow Your Food in the Future
Author:
Host:
Source:
Author Credibility:
Target Audience:
Sources Main Purpose:
Contextual Details:
The New Bionics that let us Run, Climb, and Dance
Author:
Host:
Source:
Author Credibility:
Target Audience:
Sources Main Purpose:
Contextual Details:
Meet the Robots for Humanity
Author:
Host:
Source:
Author Credibility:
Target Audience:
Sources Main Purpose:
Contextual Details:
Dependence on Computer Games by Adolescents
Author:
Host:
Source:
Author Credibility:
Target Audience:
Sources Main Purpose:
Contextual Details:
Rhetorical Analysis of Project 3
The Foundation of my Work
Once I've done all my research and gathered concrete evidence I still have a great amount of things to be accomplished. The concept that people are consumed by computers and that most cannot live without them needs to be pointed out to the people talking about this issue to bring the sources full circle and create a complete argument. The perspectives on the issue that would still need to be explained is the perspective that computers are a necessity in our current day and without computers and the dependency on computers, society would not be the same. The persons that still need to be heard from are the creators and workers for these computer and phone companies that are innovating peoples lives through their products. Finally, more information that needs to still be gathered is statistics regarding computer and phone usage for the average American in different age groups.
Are we too Dependent on Computers?
Author
1. I will draw from many different aspects in order to create a full idea and support for the public argument. The main aspect that I will pull from will be my own personal experience. I worked for the Geek Squad through high school, which provides computer support, advice, and assistance inside of Best Buy stores across the country. At this job I worked with computers daily and also had an opportunity to see how others interacted and felt about their own personal computers.
Another aspect that I will pull from will by my own general research interests. Computers and technology has always been a very large hobby of mine from the day I had my first computer running Windows 98. Since then I have built numerous computers, gotten into coding, and spend my free time reading articles around the hobby and pursuing my interests. Through this knowledge and excitement I can understand why people enjoy computers so much and can also contrast this with how dependent humans are on computers.
2. I have many preconceptions regarding the idea whether humans are too dependent on computers in our current society. I used computers and phones a massive amounts of time every single day. I feel that I am too dependent on computers even though I still use them nonstop. One preconception that I have is that humans spend too much time on computers but it can also be seen in a positive light depending on what activities they are doing on computers. One could be enriching their mind with knowledge on a computer or they could be wasting time reading about cats.
Audience
The main audience that I have in mind is America's youth and those relatively young in life. These are people ranging from little kids around the ages of five and over all the way to those in their thirties. The reason that I am choosing this audience is because these people are the largest consumers of technology and computers. They also are the creators of content on the internet and the designers of our future computers.
One main belief or assumption that this audience probably already holds is that computers are a necessity for everyday life. These people have never lived without a computer in their household if they are younger than around 18. This audience has never experienced not having a computer or access to the internet to be able to research everything that pops into their mind. The position that I am likely going to take on this issue is that humans are too dependent on computers but it is not harmful to our lives. Most of the audience will agree that computers do not take up too much of our lives.
A specific group of people that fall within the definition of "target audience" for my public argument is college students. They fall within this audience because they consume technology the most out of many different age groups whether it be phones or laptops. I will convince them from my perspective by providing facts and realizations that they can relate to.
A specific group of people that fall within the definition of "target audience" for my public argument is college students. They fall within this audience because they consume technology the most out of many different age groups whether it be phones or laptops. I will convince them from my perspective by providing facts and realizations that they can relate to.
Purpose/Message
I want to give people an understanding of how much they use technology in their lives everyday, I want it to leave people rethinking picking up their phone at the dinner table or while sitting in their rooms and realize how often they turn to technology as an aid for certain situations. I want my audience to consider how often they spend texting and consider all the time they spend reading articles on Facebook. Once the audience takes the time to consider this, they can make an educated decision regarding their time spent on computers and how often they turn to computers and phones in order to better their lives or make them feel better about themselves.
Once I've done all my research and gathered concrete evidence I still have a great amount of things to be accomplished. The concept that people are consumed by computers and that most cannot live without them needs to be pointed out to the people talking about this issue to bring the sources full circle and create a complete argument. The perspectives on the issue that would still need to be explained is the perspective that computers are a necessity in our current day and without computers and the dependency on computers, society would not be the same. The persons that still need to be heard from are the creators and workers for these computer and phone companies that are innovating peoples lives through their products. Finally, more information that needs to still be gathered is statistics regarding computer and phone usage for the average American in different age groups.
Context
Genre:
The course genre I will be writing in for project 3 will be a video essay.
The kinds of genre expectations that come along with this genre are video clips with a voice over explaining the argument on the screen and text to follow along. The video essay will also include sound affects. The audience expects to be able to watch, listen, and be guided through the video almost painlessly.
My history working on video essays is making videos for classes in high school and also having a large amount of experience with Sony Vegas.
My comfort level and general feelings about video essays are very good. I feel that I can create a great video regarding this public argument. Also I will be able to integrate many videos since the project is on humans consumption of computers.
The two most effective conventions in this genre are voice overs reading information off and also text on the screen for the viewer to read. I believe these two work together to keep the attention of the audience, causing them to actually take in the information.
When?
Major historical events that might impact how my audience perceives my argument is the innovation of computers in the recent past and also the wide spread of the internet across the world, connecting people with information that they previously would never experience. The biggest events that I need to include are January 21, 1986, the first time computers were in the USA and August 6, 1991, the release of the World Wide Web.
Computers make the world a better place
Computers are necessary for nearly everything in our lives
Computers increase the quality of life for humans
We need computers to store and share data
Monday, March 28, 2016
Editorial Report 9a
Digging Deep into my Text
Rough Cut:
David Brown and Anjelina Belakovskaia stressed the importance of conveying information to their audience. In order to present research to audiences both in and out of the financial industry, these professionals have to rely on the tools available to them that can make complex ideas digestible. This is where the two genres of a research publication and graphs and tables tie together. Rhetorical concepts come into play through these genres in multiple manners. The main rhetorical concepts that Brown and Belakovskaia utilize in their works is ethos and logos. Logos is the use of logic and reasoning. A research publication’s foundation is logic and reasoning. Without the use of logos, the financial industry would not make sense at all or even be credible. David Brown conveys this logos in his papers with the backing of his research that he can thoroughly explain. Brown is able to reference his findings with his studies, statistics, and the cooperation of other professionals. Another factor in the publications that provides reasoning is the structure of the publication. With a proper beginning, middle, and end, the publications provide a logical explanation of the financial theories given by the author.Re-Edited Selection
David Brown and Anjelina Belakovskaia stressed the importance of conveying information to their audience. In order to present research to audiences both in and out of the financial industry, these professionals have to rely on the tools available to them that can make complex ideas digestible. This is where the two genres of a research publication and graphs and tables tie together. Rhetorical concepts come into play through these genres in multiple manners. The main rhetorical concepts that Brown and Belakovskaia utilize in their works is ethos and logos. Logos is the use of logic and reasoning. A research publication’s foundation is logic and reasoning. Without the use of logos, the financial industry would not make sense at all or even be credible. David Brown conveys this logos in his papers with the backing of his research that he can thoroughly explain. Brown is able to reference his findings with his studies, statistics, and the cooperation of other professionals. Another factor in the publications that provides reasoning is the structure of the publication. With a proper beginning, middle, and end, the publications provide a logical explanation of the financial theories given by the author.Sunday, March 27, 2016
Editorial Report 9b
Revising Revising Revising
Rough Cut:
Research papers are the core of content creation and publication. Research papers are created through collaboration and dedication of academia within their respected field. A research paper goes through vigorous editing and input in order to become published. David Brown at the University of Arizona has put a great amount of time into his research papers and has successfully published more than four publications. Brown actively travels to different research facilities and works in cooperation with other research professors in order to create a work that can be published to the public. Creating a research paper requires many steps. The first step of creating a research paper is finding something to research. Professionals commit their careers to studying and developing new research of topics within their respected fields. Those in the finance fields often focus on investing and matters involving the flow of money.
Re-Edited Selection:
Research papers are the core of content creation and publication. Research papers are created through collaboration and dedication of academia within their respected field. A research paper goes through vigorous editing and input in order to become published. David Brown at the University of Arizona has put a great amount of time into his research papers and has successfully published more than four publications. Brown actively travels to different research facilities and works in cooperation with other research professors in order to create a work that can be published to the public. Creating a research paper requires many steps. The first step of creating a research paper is finding something to research. Professionals commit their careers to studying and developing new research of topics within their respected fields. Those in the finance fields often focus on investing and matters involving the flow of money.
Reflection on Post Production
The Final Phase
Some of the main successes that I had during this week's process work of post production were revising my work. I was able to utilize the peer reviews of my rough cut in order to work towards a better final draft that is adequate to submit. Another success that I experienced during this week's process work was being able to revise my own work a week after creating a rough draft, which gave me a new look on the work that I was constantly reading and looking over the week before. One example of the process work that was a success was being peer reviewed by Nicolas Herard who gave me very good advice and was honest as to how I should improve my project.
I faced many challenges during this week's process work. The main challenge that I faced during this week's process work was the time management for the blog work. Managing my time to where I could have adequate time to both finalize my draft and work on the necessary blog posts. An example of this is that I spent so much time peer reviewing on the weekend that it possibly took away from the time to work on and revise my final draft.
I think next week will go very well because we are starting a new project and I get a new start.
Overall I am feeling very confident about the project. I believe that I have put a great amount of work into the project and trust that if I put in great work I will get great results.
Some of the main successes that I had during this week's process work of post production were revising my work. I was able to utilize the peer reviews of my rough cut in order to work towards a better final draft that is adequate to submit. Another success that I experienced during this week's process work was being able to revise my own work a week after creating a rough draft, which gave me a new look on the work that I was constantly reading and looking over the week before. One example of the process work that was a success was being peer reviewed by Nicolas Herard who gave me very good advice and was honest as to how I should improve my project.
I faced many challenges during this week's process work. The main challenge that I faced during this week's process work was the time management for the blog work. Managing my time to where I could have adequate time to both finalize my draft and work on the necessary blog posts. An example of this is that I spent so much time peer reviewing on the weekend that it possibly took away from the time to work on and revise my final draft.
I think next week will go very well because we are starting a new project and I get a new start.
Overall I am feeling very confident about the project. I believe that I have put a great amount of work into the project and trust that if I put in great work I will get great results.
Peer Review for Jake Gyles
Making Others Better
The person that I decided to peer review is Jake Gyles. His draft of his podcast can be found HERE.
The activity that I decided to do for Jake is the second activity, making a recommendation about form. I told Jake that the best thing he could do to improve his podcast. The biggest form recommendation I could give to Jake Gyles would be to include different conventions of the podcast genre in order to create a better work. The first thing that Jake can include in his podcast to make it even better is to add introduction and concluding music and phrases. Adding a zinger to the podcast will invite the audience into his podcast from the very start. Some sort of music or tones will pull the reader even deeper into the podcast.
Another main thing that Jake needs to add to his podcast is the main content. As of now he seems to have a solid plan within his draft for his final. Jake will need to write a script or outline to assist him in moving through the podcast and still being able to convey all the necessary information to the audience.
The person that I decided to peer review is Jake Gyles. His draft of his podcast can be found HERE.
The activity that I decided to do for Jake is the second activity, making a recommendation about form. I told Jake that the best thing he could do to improve his podcast. The biggest form recommendation I could give to Jake Gyles would be to include different conventions of the podcast genre in order to create a better work. The first thing that Jake can include in his podcast to make it even better is to add introduction and concluding music and phrases. Adding a zinger to the podcast will invite the audience into his podcast from the very start. Some sort of music or tones will pull the reader even deeper into the podcast.
Another main thing that Jake needs to add to his podcast is the main content. As of now he seems to have a solid plan within his draft for his final. Jake will need to write a script or outline to assist him in moving through the podcast and still being able to convey all the necessary information to the audience.
Peer Review for Sofia Haserot
Reviewing others to make them better
I reviewed the QRG of Sofia Haserot found HERE
The activity that I decided to do for peer reviewing this QRG is the second activity, making a recommendation about form.
I believe that this QRG is a great start to utilizing the genres of a QRG. I believe the best recommendation about form that I could give would be the overall visual element of a QRG. I think that you can create a much greater QRG by having images on at least every page and utilizing tight text wrap to give the images a natural place on the page among the text. By doing this, the eyes of the reader are able to flow naturally through the page, making the content easier to digest. Another aspect of the QRG that I believe will improve it greatly is by changing the font to something that is more inviting to the reader and spacing out the text into small sections. In all, creating a better appearance through titles, white space, and image spacing, the QRG will be improved greatly.
One thing that I admired about the work in this QRG was the amount of information and detail within the QRG. I can tell that the author is passionate about their field of study and has a lot to say regarding the different genres. In all the QRG is very impressive but just needs cosmetic fixes to be considered great.
Sunday, March 13, 2016
Open Post to Peer Reviewers
Sharing my work with others
I anticipate the post-production to be a complete rewrite of my essay. My draft was rushed and weak in my opinion so for post-production I will ensure that I create a work that I am satisfied with. The major issue with my rough draft is the length of the essay as it is very short right now. Another weakness of the essay is not having a complete description and understanding of the different genres in the essay. The biggest strength of my essay is the utilization of my interviews in order to convey the information of the differing genres.
LINK to draft
I anticipate the post-production to be a complete rewrite of my essay. My draft was rushed and weak in my opinion so for post-production I will ensure that I create a work that I am satisfied with. The major issue with my rough draft is the length of the essay as it is very short right now. Another weakness of the essay is not having a complete description and understanding of the different genres in the essay. The biggest strength of my essay is the utilization of my interviews in order to convey the information of the differing genres.
LINK to draft
Reflection on Production
Reflection: Explain how you really messed up
What were some of the successes during this week's process work? Explain.
The main success of this week's process work was building a rough cut of my project. This is where my ideas finally came together as one and created the entirety of my project. Another major success I had was finally looking deeply into the ideas behind my project and gathering actual content to include in my project.
What were some of the challenges during this week's process work? Explain.
The main challenge that I faced during this week's process work was time management. Making the draft seemed to sneak up on me when I was focused doing the blog work so I put very little time into the draft of my project. Another challenge I faced was gathering concrete content to include in my draft and then finding support from my interviews to back up those statements.
How do you think next week will go, based on your experiences this week?
I think next week will go well depending on how I manage my time and if I start early and put the necessary time into my final draft.
How are you feeling about the project overall at this point?
Overall I am feeling very confident about my project now that it is the second project and I have all the first time jitters done with.
What were some of the successes during this week's process work? Explain.
The main success of this week's process work was building a rough cut of my project. This is where my ideas finally came together as one and created the entirety of my project. Another major success I had was finally looking deeply into the ideas behind my project and gathering actual content to include in my project.
What were some of the challenges during this week's process work? Explain.
The main challenge that I faced during this week's process work was time management. Making the draft seemed to sneak up on me when I was focused doing the blog work so I put very little time into the draft of my project. Another challenge I faced was gathering concrete content to include in my draft and then finding support from my interviews to back up those statements.
How do you think next week will go, based on your experiences this week?
I think next week will go well depending on how I manage my time and if I start early and put the necessary time into my final draft.
How are you feeling about the project overall at this point?
Overall I am feeling very confident about my project now that it is the second project and I have all the first time jitters done with.
Production Report
8b
Reporting what is known:
Reporting what is known:
How did you decide to use form to present your content in the raw material you've shared here? How did the conventions of your chosen genre influence your choice?
How did the production of this raw material go? What kinds of hiccups, challenges, successes, creative epiphanies, etc. occurred during the process?
Outline Item:
Adaption of Outline Item:
Production Report
8a
Reporting what is known:
Reporting what is known:
How did you decide to use form to present your content in the raw material you've shared here? How did the conventions of your chosen genre influence your choice?
How did the production of this raw materiel go? What kinds of hiccups, challenges, successes, creative epiphanies, etc. occurred during the process?
Outline Item:
Adaption of Outline Item:
Tuesday, March 8, 2016
Sunday, February 28, 2016
Report on My Interviews
Learning from an Interview
 |
| Shazer, Mirade. "Interview" 10/13/2015 via Pixabay |
Three significant genres that I learned about from the interviews are essays, google hangouts, and excel.
These genres differ from each other in many ways. An essay is written information to convey an idea. Google hangouts is a way for people to communicate via voice, text, and video. Excel is a way for people to organize numbers and put data in a manner that it is understandable to others. Conventions of an essay are the classic conventions such as grammar, voice, organization, word choice. Conventions for Google Hangouts are video chats and the voice of other people as they communicate to their fellows over the internet. Finally, excel is using complex formulas and graphs to convey their information to their peers researching in their field.
Professionals in the finance field experience many challenges when writing in their genres. The most challenging aspect of writing essays is the research aspect. In order to write an essay, a professional has to have the content available and they do this through extensive research and peer cooperation. The most difficult challenge for Google Hangouts is coordinating times and dates as to when everyone can be on the Google Hangout as they have to be in front of their computer and have the time to talk and communicate. The final challenge with excel is that learning excel and spreadsheets can be very difficult and tedious. Also in order to properly utilize excel, they have to know what they want and how they want it because Excel does not simply walk them through their issues.
Much excitement was expressed for the use of Google Hangouts. In the interview, Brown told me that he does not email or call people that often and therefore, Google Hangouts is the primary form of communication between himself and his tight-nit group of peers. He enjoys being able to have video chats with professionals in his field from across the world.
Genre examples of excel and financial essays will rarely be found in mass media. The only outlet these papers would be seen is in a very specific subreddit of reddit like /r/finance. Google Hangouts can be seen often in mass media but not with a financial purpose. Many people tune into public Google Hangouts to see discussions and shows varying from sports, games, and even esports. People will often share these Google Hangouts on twitter, facebook, and reddit so others can tune in.
My Interviewees on Social Media
Creating, Sharing, and Exchanging Content: Social Media
 |
| FirmBee. "Office" 01/19/2014 via Pixabay. |
David Brown:
I could not find any social media on David Brown. In the interview he claimed that he does not use any social media.Anjelina Belakovskaia:
Belakovskaia goes by her regular name on Facebook. She utilizes Facebook as a way to connect with her family and those that she coaches for chess. The author has not published any pieces in an academic journal but she has won three U.S. Women's Chess Championships and uses Facebook to promote her chess history.I also learned that Belakovskaia is still very important in the chess world and despite teaching in Eller, still actively coaches chess teams to victory.
Belakovskaia varies from in class and social media because she is conveyed in social media as a chess professional first and an educator second.
Rhetorical Analysis of Academic Journal
The Journal of Finance
 |
| Nick Hernandez |
1. The authors of this specific article that I have selected from the February 2016 issue are R. David McLean and Jeffrey Pontiff. The authors are simply portrayed by their name and their affiliated University or organization where they conduct their research. The issue that this specific article discusses is "Does Academic Research Destroy Stock Return Predictability?"
2. The intended audience for this journal issue are those with a finance background doing research and also those within the stock trading industry. Some specific details that show this is the specific content within the document such as different predictor types where the data is only digestible to those with a deep knowledge of the financial field. Table IV, "Predictor Returns across Different Predictor Types" is a perfect example of this.
3. The context surrounding this specific article
4. The overall message of this journal article is to report the findings of a massive research intensive investigation. Once this research was recorded and a conclusion was made as to how academic research effects stock return predictability, then this information is conveyed in this academic journal. I decided this by reading through the headings of the articles and the conclusion. A specific example is "Our findings suggest that investors learn about mispricing from academic publications.
5. The purpose is to get information and research out to those in the same field in order to progress finance as a whole. An example of this is the journal itself, an outlet for published research.
My Discipline
How do professionals in my major communicate with each other and with different kids of audiences?
 |
| Geralt. "Finance" 06/05/2008 via Pixabay. |
1. Students in finance learn nearly everything about business. Finance is a subsection of economics and through financial classes. Finance majors learn every aspect about money and businesses as a whole and how money makes the world go round.
2. People with a finance degree usually go on to work in nearly every field of business. Finance majors often have good chances of working in banking, retail, accounting, management, and consulting.
3. I was drawn to this field through my family as my mom works for Bank of America and my dad works for a large corporate insurance company. They showed me what the financial world was like and what a person with a finance degree can accomplish.
4. Three leaders within the financial field are Warren Buffet, Janet Yellen, and Mario Draghi. These people are interesting to me because they are giant figures within the world of business. Warren Buffet is known as one of the smartest businessmen in the United States. Janet Yellen is the Chair of the Board of Governors of the Federal Reserve System. and Mario Draghi is the President of the European Central Bank.
5. Academic Journals:
The Journal of Economics and International Finance - AcademicJournals.org
Journal of Finance - Wiley.com
Annual Review of Financial Economics. -AnnualReviews.org
My Interview Subjects
An interview is a conversation where questions are asked and answers are given.
 |
| Tumisu. "Interview Job Icon" 11/22/2015 via pixabay. |
David Brown
 |
| David Brown |
- Assistant Professor of Finance - Eller College of Management / University of Arizona
- B.S.B., Business Administration (Finance) University of Kansas, 2005
- Ph.D. in Finance, University of Colorado Boulder, 2014
- Has worked in Finance industry for 11 years.
Interview:
McClelland Hall 315 - Department of Finance
February 19 - 11AM
1. What is your specific field of work?
2. How do people in your field communicate professionally?
3. What kinds of texts have you authored or created?
a. Written? Audio? Visual?
4. What kinds of genres do you work in?
a. Programs/Software, Data, Graphs?
5. How do people in your field utilize presentations to the public?
6. What audiences do they have? Ex (Field of work)
7. What is the most challenging aspect of conveying information in your field?
8. How do people in your field use either emotional, logical, or ethical appeals to sway their audience?
9. How has your background prepared you for writing/communicating in your field?
10. How has 21st century technology changed/impacted your professional work?
11. What is your favorite way to communicate information to those within your field?
a. I.E. Email, Excel, Documents, Mail, Telephone
12. What popular forms of communications do you feel are the least effective in your industry?
2. How do people in your field communicate professionally?
3. What kinds of texts have you authored or created?
a. Written? Audio? Visual?
4. What kinds of genres do you work in?
a. Programs/Software, Data, Graphs?
5. How do people in your field utilize presentations to the public?
6. What audiences do they have? Ex (Field of work)
7. What is the most challenging aspect of conveying information in your field?
8. How do people in your field use either emotional, logical, or ethical appeals to sway their audience?
9. How has your background prepared you for writing/communicating in your field?
10. How has 21st century technology changed/impacted your professional work?
11. What is your favorite way to communicate information to those within your field?
a. I.E. Email, Excel, Documents, Mail, Telephone
12. What popular forms of communications do you feel are the least effective in your industry?
 |
| Anjelina Belakovskaia |
- M.S. in Mathematics in Finance, New York University, 2001\
- B.S. in Economics. Odessa State Agrarian University in Ukraine
1. What is your specific field of work?
2. How do people in your field communicate professionally?
3. What kinds of texts have you authored or created?
a. Written? Audio? Visual?
4. What kinds of genres do you work in?
a. Programs/Software, Data, Graphs?
5. How do people in your field utilize presentations to the public?
6. What audiences do they have? Ex (Field of work)
7. What is the most challenging aspect of conveying information in your field?
8. How do people in your field use either emotional, logical, or ethical appeals to sway their audience?
9. How has your background prepared you for writing/communicating in your field?
10. How has 21st century technology changed/impacted your professional work?
11. What is your favorite way to communicate information to those within your field?
a. I.E. Email, Excel, Documents, Mail, Telephone
12. What popular forms of communications do you feel are the least effective in your industry?
From Academia to Social Media
Social Media in Academics
 |
| kropekk. "Social Media" 08/19/2014 via Pixabay |
R. David McLean:
The only form of social media that I could locate for David McLean is his google site.
The social media presence of this author is very weak and the only information available on his website are his publications and a copy of his resume.
I have learned that David McLean is a professor at DePaul University. I also learned that McLean got his undergrad from Arizona State University and his Ph.D in finance from Boston College. Another interesting fact I learned about McLean is that he often works within the economy of Asian countries and spent time working in Japan as a Shinomura Fellow.
The persona of David McLean does not vary from his website and his academic journal. McLean is very professional in the academic publication and the website is an extension of his work as a financial researcher. The website serves as a way for people in the field to communicate with him and find copies of the works he took part in. One example of the professionalism on the website is his resume, which is very well done and professional, like his published essay in the finance journal.
Academic Discourse & Genre
The Journal of Finance
 |
| Marciano, Van. "Untitled" 09/09/2015 via pixabay |
2. The genres in this journal are essay, tables, and graphs. These genres are all significantly different. An essay is a formal writing of the research in words. A table is a way to organize data on the paper for someone to view. Finally a graph is a way for someone to view data in a visual manner to have a greater understanding.
3. An essay is a formal writing of the research in words. A table is a way to organize data on the paper for someone to view. Finally a graph is a way for someone to view data in a visual manner to have a greater understanding. The purpose of an essay is for someone to be able to read and digest the information through the words and still have a professional manner. The purpose of graphs and tables is to put data in a way that people can view it rather than explaining it in words. The target audience of these genres are those reading the journal with the ability to process this data and understand it.
My Interviewees as Professional Writers
Putting research onto paper and publishing data.
 |
| Semihundido. "Sailor Professional Gear Medium Nib" 07/15/2011 via Flickr. |
David Brown
David Brown has his Ph.D in finance from the University of Colorado Boulder. Brown specializes in many elements of finance. The topics of publications that Brown writes include topics such as price feedback, financial taxes, and dark pool exclusivity matters.
Simple Intuition Gone Awry: Combining Real and Financial Options in Tax Elections
Both of these publications from David Brown are lengthy papers through which he published with other financial professionals. The main genre that Brown publishes is a detailed research report with graphs and visuals throughout the paper. These publications were presented in national conferences to multiple professionals in the financial field and after discussion and cooperation, the research would then be published in the form of the report. These pages range from 40-60 pages of content. The context surrounding the pieces of publications are the accumulation of months of research as a committee. The overall message of these pieces is informing the research of a very specific topic within finance. These papers include advice and conclusions from the time spent researching. I decided that these are the messages are to inform of the research due to the process of writing the paper and conveying this research.
Publications:
Investing in Security Price Informativeness: The Role of IPO UnderpricingSimple Intuition Gone Awry: Combining Real and Financial Options in Tax Elections
Both of these publications from David Brown are lengthy papers through which he published with other financial professionals. The main genre that Brown publishes is a detailed research report with graphs and visuals throughout the paper. These publications were presented in national conferences to multiple professionals in the financial field and after discussion and cooperation, the research would then be published in the form of the report. These pages range from 40-60 pages of content. The context surrounding the pieces of publications are the accumulation of months of research as a committee. The overall message of these pieces is informing the research of a very specific topic within finance. These papers include advice and conclusions from the time spent researching. I decided that these are the messages are to inform of the research due to the process of writing the paper and conveying this research.
Sunday, February 21, 2016
Brutally Honest Self-Assessment
Being Honest to Oneself
 |
| Unnamed. "Lifetime" 01/05/2010 via Flickr. |
1. How are you feeling about the project you just submitted for assessment? Give me your raw, unvarnished opinion of your own project overall.
I am feeling confident about the project that I just submitted for assessment. Overall, I am proud with the genre that I chose, a podcast. It is not everyday that a person records, edits, and publishes a podcast. Many may underestimate the work that goes into a podcast when in reality, it requires a great effort and knowledge of technology. I am confident in the content within the podcast because the blogs made it easy to create the recordings as they became my step by step guide to recording the information for the podcast. I am also very satisfied that I met the conventions including the editing work that I put into it like animations and music.2. What are the major weaknesses of the project you submitted? Explain carefully how and why you consider these elements to be weak or under-developed.
The major weaknesses of the project that I submitted is the topic matter. The topic can be very bland and difficult to listen to if you are not fully interested in the Greek financial crisis. Another major weakness of the podcast is my speaking skills, which are good, yet for a podcast, may be lacking. I consider these elements to be under-developed because I have never done anything involving editing and recording my voice together to make a full soundtrack to convey information. In all, the change of pace was difficult but I feel that I overcame the challenge adequately.3. What are the major strengths of the project you submitted? Explain carefully how and why you consider these elements to be strong or well-developed.
The major strengths of the project I submitted are the organization and the professionalism of the podcast. I feel as if I was able to convey all the information and the stockholders in a non biased and efficient manner. Another major strength is the editing to the podcast. I was able to include intro and outro music with a quality microphone in order to make a professional podcast that can be taken seriously when listened to. Another major strength was the amount of research I put into the topic due to the blogs. which aided greatly in creating the podcast.
4. What do you think of how you practiced time management for Project 1? Did you put enough time and effort into the project? Did you procrastinate and wait till the last minute to work on things? Share any major time management triumphs or fails....
Overall, I managed my time well enough to complete the blogs in an adequate manner and not having to short the content of my blog. I usually put 12-15 hours a week for all of the blog work that had to be done. I am more than confident that I put enough time and effort into the project because when done with each blog, i was satisfied with my work and proud for the time I put into it. I did not procrastinate where I ran out of time but I did procrastinate in terms of the week where I have sacrificed my entire weekend of the semester for the sake of my blogs. I believe if I work throughout the week then the workload will be easier and I can relax on my weekends rather then spend them working nonstop on blog work.My Verbs
Verb: A word used to describe an action, state, or occurrence.
 |
| MlibFR. "Picto Verb" 06/04/2012 via Wikipedia Commons. |
List of Verbs:
is
talking
talk
is
standing
take
experienced
battling
seen
shines
experience
thrive
wades
struggle
became
sits
seen
handcrafted
is
founded
functions
sits
struggling
choked
offers
meet
is
seen
is
consists
founded
was
proved
came
encourage
was
making
took
represents
is
made
has
established
removing
is
working
traced
switched
is
founded
united
is
contains
overlooks
is
was
has
ties
pulls
borrowing
continued
was
adopt
lied
had
plagued
imploded
announced
raising
borrow
took
imposed
requiring
was
pay
grow
relies
visited
made
bought
put
leading
bringing
pushed
deny
take
rebuild
increase
lower
leave
abandon
take
rely
stop
offered
allowing
operate
forcing
raise
cut
grow
was
recovering
Verb Counts:
is: 10
was: 5
experience: 2
grow: 2
made: 2
grow: 2
made: 2
Subscribe to:
Posts (Atom)