Final Peer Review Before the End
PJ's Essay can be found HERE
Activity 5: Make a Content Suggestion
Overall, PJ has written a very strong essay with a clear and concise argument regarding the banning of elicit serenades to sororities on the University of Arizona. PJ successfully adds a personal sentiment by explain his membership in a fraternity here at Arizona. Then he gives a personal anecdote of when the news was released that fraternities could no longer serenade in the manner that they had been doing previously. After this PJ gives statements from both sides of the argument as to why serenades were banned and then gives arguments as to why we should keep having the same type of serenades that were occurring on campus. One suggestion that I could make is to find another party to get input from that is not fraternities or sororities to get a feeling for how the general population feels about this issue.
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